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He deceived me, just like everyone else, asking me
Ever so patiently to open up to him and share
All my haunting thoughts, those that keep me awake.
Racking sobs erupting from my trembling lips,
Tossing and turning all night, so I do as he asks,
Bearing my soul to him, letting him see my feelings,
Revealing parts of me no one else knew,
Extracting painful memories and entrusting secrets
All the while, he leads me on.  I really should have
Known, should have known he would betray me.
This has the same sort of setup as my other poetry, with the word down the left side being heartbreak.
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Libs01 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I like this. So. Damn. Much. :'( 
ancientfire33 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Student Writer
Oh, I am going through this right now :'( And I faced him and everything but he still leads me on, just strumming on my heartstrings...
TheSaylex Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
hey, my girlfriend just broke up with me and blamed it all on me.
she says i did just that, lead her on and manipulate her, but i did nothing wrong...
she broke up with me for the fun of it, planned a double date before breaking up as well...

we we're meant to have a proper longlasting relationship...

what went wrong?
but not a lot of guys lea you on and betray you...
deathbymortgage Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012
Oh, do I know this feeling - just got hurt by the same guy twice, and the second time I KNEW he was going to hurt me, but I still kept going like an idiot.
NynyWeenie Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Still so deep.
Savaliste Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2012
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BrittanyChayanne Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2012
I think it's called acrylic poetry when you have the words like that.. Lol not sure. This is really good :)
LucidScream Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011
So True. This really resonated with me.
CMDay Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011
This really effects me now because it's happening. Drew a lot of emotion. good work.
sampea Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2014
Me too.
lilred2012 Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2011
it is deep and true, it speaks the truth no one wants to hear
iheartmarth Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2011
very true.
candylove369 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2011
That was really good, it really deep and so true :/
Daniellestarling Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I love this. you have talent
Chibi-Pineapple Featured By Owner May 26, 2011
True, beautiful poem!
PirateHunter4ev Featured By Owner May 1, 2011  Student General Artist
I just got dumped and he wouldn't even be man enough to tell me why. :,( It's nice to know other people know what I'm going through. Thank you so much For the inspiration :iconhugs:
vivienami Featured By Owner May 22, 2011
i just got dumped too..via sms. because of his 'best friend' (girl) which came back after a year as an exchange student..
in the end..they're all liars, aren't they?
PirateHunter4ev Featured By Owner May 25, 2011  Student General Artist
No kidding. I'm sorry about you getting dumped :)
vivienami Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2011
:) thank you. but i guess it's better this way anyway (as always^^)
PirateHunter4ev Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2011  Student General Artist
dont worry i already got a new guy im sure ull find someone :D
Pengulili Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2011   Digital Artist
amazing and soo true
NynyWeenie Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Happens from time to time.
kageshoujo Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2011  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Oh now I'm crying... I bared everything to him and he just... I don't know and I don't understand why he left me. Beautiful poetry by the way!
Moonlit-Fantasy Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2010
this is so beautifully done!! i let a guy friend lead me all i have is a freaking broken least im not alone in this :floating:
superpeanut17 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2010
it reminds me of one of my guy friends...him left my side for another girl he use to ask me how i feel and i would tell him anything now he's with another girl and i see him so close to her and far away from me :(
ChocolateQuill Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2010  Student General Artist
I AGREE. this basically happened to me. Gah.
buckiesmom Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2010
And betrayal is the worst pain of all.
Beautiful write.
I am saving this to remind me that I am not alone in my pain.
angelroxz2 Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2010
so freaking true! and i hate the fact of it!
this is making me cry...
Mizuki-Anya Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2010  Professional General Artist
I TRUSTED him, yet why don't i wanna slap him? Maybe cuz i want him to feel the same pain!
polkadot24 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2010
This makes me miss him.. :( this is a very good btw :)
bakaikarus Featured By Owner May 8, 2010
oh wow i didn't even notice the heartbreak down the left side, that just make it even more impressive =]
aceofspades28 Featured By Owner May 5, 2010   Writer
Very deep and emotional. Exceptional work.
coldsummernights Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2010
nice poem. i like it. :)
diedwhenborn Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2010  Student General Artist
i feel this
Evilangel642 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
This is so beautiful and sad, and I know I'm probably the thousandth person to say this, but this relates to me so well its almost heartbreaking (no pun intended...)

Well done, you have amazing talent! Favorited!
Moontress124 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2009
beautiful, looks like it could be a song.
Zexionlover666 Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2009
Sort of reminds me of the song "almost lover" by a find frenzy.

I like it though
Freerange-Dork Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2009
Not sure if you know this already, but this type of poem, with a word being spelled down the side, is called an acrostic poem. And you've written it very well, the lines all flow together wonderfully and you've created an intense and distressing feel that fits 'heartbreak' perfectly.
heyykidd Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2009
this is really great
its deep
I love it
Troubledatheart Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2009
omg i so know this, great poetry :)
VampireInTheSunlight Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2009   Writer
you shouldn't have known
and don't you learn that
Kibas1truluv Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2009
What beautiful poetry. I could never write anything like that, and having the side spell out "HEARTBREAK" is the icing on the cake. :+favlove:
VexaLuv Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2008
I can so relate to this right now.
GaelicStorm Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2008
I can relate, if there was ever a poem that captured the feeling of this particular heartbreak, yours is it. Great job, unfortunately it was born of pain, but it was a beautiful birth nonetheless :)
Larah88 Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2008
I can relate as well...Great writing.
I was actually thinking of trying to do that format with the word on the left down last night as I was thinking of a poem to write down. Haven't tried it yet, though.
This is really good
xbritt143rhcpx Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2008
thats very good... and i can relate. i like it very much :]
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writingisart2 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2008
Wow... this is really emotional and beautiful, and ever so sad... I'm sure a lot of people could relate to it! I must say, you did a fantastic job. :D
detailoring Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2008
Thanks... I'm glad it's been well-received.
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